Sunday, March 15, 2009

Taken Away Chapter 2

“What do you think she’s going to be like?” Bethany Christenson asked her older sister Olivia.
“From how she’s grown up as a billion dollar child, probably a stuck up snob,” Olivia answered, not bothering to hide the disdain in her voice.
“Give her a chance, Liv,” Arabella Davenport said. Olivia didn’t reply. It wasn’t that she didn’t have a response, but she didn’t want them knowing why she’s hated her little sister for almost her whole life.
“I can’t believe how much we look alike, aside from her dyed hair, of course,” Bethany said, practically vibrating in the backseat of Arabella’s car, a black 1967 Chevrolet Chevelle SS. It was three o’clock and Arabella said she’d pick up Olivia, her best friend, from the University with Bethany from school. Arabella was a senior in high school and have been best friends with Olivia since they could walk. They met in daycare and haven’t separated since. Even with Olivia in college, they hang out whenever possible which was almost every day since Arabella practically lived at the Christenson’s home. Olivia usually drives herself home, but her car is in the auto shop getting fixed after breaking down for the third time in six months. She was soon going to have to get rid of it and that troubled her greatly.
“Do you think—” Bethany started.
“Stop with the ‘do you think!’” Olivia growled. “You’ll meet her in ten minutes so chill out!”
“Like you have the right to lecture me about chilling,” Bethany said, glaring at her eldest sister.
“Both of you chill out!” Arabella barked, glaring at the road since she couldn’t glare at the sisters. “You’re not doing any good snapping at each other. If you’re nervous, how do you think she feels? She just found out her entire life was a lie! She had to abandon everything she’s ever known to live with complete strangers; a family she never even knew existed. Her parents die than four years later, she finds out she was kidnapped as a baby and everything she’s ever known was at the expense of a family’s pain. Olivia, I don’t know what your problem with her is, but keep a lid on it while you’re around her. Bethany, she may seem exciting to you, but don’t hover and ask a million questions I know you have for her. Give her space so she can get used to what’s happened to her.”
Both girls were dumbfounded by Arabella’s speech.
“You’re right,” Bethany said, feeling guilty.
“You two just need to calm down. I know this is bigger than anything you guys have been through, but handling like you are now is going to make it a disaster,” Arabella replied. “Liv, even if you’ve pre-judged her and don’t want to make an attempt to get to know her, try to be civil to her for Alyson.
Olivia remained silent, knowing but not wanting to admit that her best friend was right.
“Thanks Ari,” Bethany said sincerely. She knew she needed that; they both did.
“No problem. You guys know I’m always here to set you right when you’re being less than intelligent,” Arabella said with a warm, genuine smile.
“Oh, and who puts you in your place when you’re wrong?” Bethany asked, raising an eyebrow. Arabella flashed her a cocky smile in the backseat.
“No one, because I’m never wrong,” she stated arrogantly, her eyes alight with amusement. Olivia scoffed loudly, which made the other two girls laugh.
They pulled into the Christenson driveway two minutes later.
“Tells me what happens later tonight,” Arabella said to Olivia, who muttered a “later” and exited the car. Her younger sister was about to leave, but the driver stopped her. “Beth?”
“Yeah?”
“Tell me what really happens tomorrow in school. You know Liv can be a little over dramatic sometimes,” she said. Bethany smiled.
“No problem, Ari.”
“Remember, questions to a minimum.”
“Promise,” the fifteen year old replied. “Bye.”
Bethany went inside to find her eldest sister and her mother talking.
“Hey, Bethany,” Alyson greeted her third child.
“Hey mom,” the girl said, hugging her.
“She’s upstairs?” Olivia said, her curious tone betraying her determination to appear nonchalant.
“Yes, she’s unpacking.”
“What’s she like?” Bethany asked, looking as if she were about to start bouncing on the balls of her feet. Alyson sighed and looked up the stairs.
“She’s...not what I expected.”
“What do you mean?”
“Well...with how she found out about us and us about her—”
“By getting arrested for breaking and entering and vandalism,” Olivia snorted with a frown. “Sounds like a great kid.”
“I admit I thought I was going to have some problems, such as behavior. However, she’s very polite, laid back, and outgoing. She’s very aware of how I feel about this situation and she assured me of many things.”
“What do you mean assured you?” Bethany asked.
“She said that I can ask her about her life because she would be insulted if I didn’t want to know. I thought she was going to be closed off because of who we are; a family who took her away from her home,” Alyson replied.
“Huh...maybe she’s not as big a brat as I thought she was,” Olivia admitted.
“Olivia Lynn, you will not speak like that in front of her,” Alyson scolded the nineteen year old.
“Don’t worry mom, Ari already read us the riot act in the car. I’ll behave,” the eldest child said.
“Good, at least someone is thinking about Blake’s feelings.”
“Can we go meet her now?” Bethany said, thinking that the argument was pointless and stupid.
“Yes, let’s go,” Olivia said with mock enthusiasm.
The three women walked up the stairs only to hear a thumping bass and the sound of hip hop greet them. Olivia recognized the artist.
“Great, she’s an Eminem fan,” she said with disgust. Alyson cleared her throat and knocked on the door. They waited for a minute, then Alyson tried again.
“She probably can’t hear it,” Bethany said.
“Who could?” her eldest sister asked with a slight sneer. Alyson hesitated, then grabbed the door handle and turned it, opening the door just barely. She peeked in and saw Blake hanging a poster of a rock band called Avenged Sevenfold on her wall.
Olivia and Bethany gasped when they entered the room. It wasn’t that it looked that different, but what was in it definitely was. An extremely state-of-the-art, very expensive looking stereo standing against a wall. Next to it were six guitars, one acoustic, another a double neck flying V, the rest various other electric guitars, all of them looking very costly. On the other side of the room were two computers, both laptops. One was, if one could call it, a normal laptop. It was looked like a high end and all three of the Christenson’s knew it probably cost more than any of them have ever spent in one place. The other laptop was...different? they all thought. It’s screen was larger than normal laptops and, instead of a regular keyboard, it had multicolored keys and about twice as many. On the walls were an assortment of posters, but also, to their surprise, two guitars mounted on the wall. The posters, however, were of two different types. One was of artists such as Eminem but also rock bands such as Avenged Sevenfold as from before, but also the Columbia singer/dancer Shakira in a revealing bikini on a beach and looking very suggestive. The second type were of cars. Sports cars, SUVs, supercars, motorcycles and almost all of them had half naked women on or by the vehicle like a male’s car calendar.
Other personal belongings were placed around the room and almost all of Blake’s clothes were in the closet or dresser. Blake turned around after she finished her placing her poster on her wall and looked slightly surprised. She grabbed a remote and paused her music.
“Sorry about that,” she said. She approached her biological family with her head high and shoulders square. She saw the ones who were her sisters and mentally took a deep breath.
Olivia was taller than her and her build was almost lanky. She had dark brown hair to the bottom of her ears with it very wavy; it looked natural to Blake. She had sea green eyes and sharp facial features. If Blake hadn’t known better, she wouldn’t have any idea that they were even related, unlike Bethany. Blake almost gasped when she saw her younger sister. She was almost a clone of the middle child, only few years younger. Same hair color (minus Blake’s artificial addition in her own). They could have easily passed for twins to an unknowing eye. However, the thing that Blake was both fascinated and also found a little creepy about were her eyes. They were the exact duplicates to Blake’s; a very beautiful, hypnotizing, striking emerald green eyes. It was easily both of the girls best physical feature. Blake had to do a mental head shake to get her bearings.
“I’m Blake Harris,” the middle child said with a smile. The oldest looked as if she had only just bit her tongue to keep from making a sarcastic remark, one that Blake could see it in her eyes. What the hell is her problem? she wondered.
“Olivia Christenson,” the older girl said, her voice sounded like she was forcing herself to speak with Blake, who was becoming more confused by the minute. She’s said three words to the college student. What’s with the hostility?
“Bethany Christenson!” said the fifteen year old. Blake looked at her and couldn’t help but smile. This girl was practically bouncing with excitement.
“Nice to meet you,” Blake said.
“You have a really sweet stereo,” the younger girl said, looking at the music playing device with a mixture of awe and envy.
“Thanks,” Blake said with a smile. Her stereo was an RCA bookshelf that was on a small, hand painted green bookshelf she found in the closet. Next to the bookshelf on both sides were two Mirage OS3-FS floor standing speakers with the grille taken off. “It docks an iPod and has a 5 CD changer with AM/FM radio.”
“That’s awesome!” the girl said with a wide smile. Blake stopped herself from laughing.
“Calm down, Bethany. It’s just a stereo,” Olivia scolded her younger sister, who shot her a glare. Blake held back from giving her one of her own. The older girl was not getting on Blake’s good side and that wasn’t good for anyone in the house.
“You’ve done a lot in only an hour,” Alyson said, trying to get rid of the sudden tension in the room. Blake shrugged and looked around the room.
“The only thing that took a while was unpacking my clothes. Didn’t realize how much I have until I opened three suitcases of them,” she answered.
“Three suitcases? Can I—I mean—never mind,” Bethany said. Blake chuckled, knowing what she was asking.
“Go ahead, I don’t mind,” she replied. Bethany let out a small squeal of excitement and dove into the closet.
“Bethany Christine,” Alyson said sternly.
“Don’t worry about it,” Blake assured the mother. “I really don’t mind.”
“She should know better than to ask to dig through someone’s clothes.”
Blake shrugged. She was confused, however. Aren’t sisters supposed to share and go through each other’s clothes, borrowing them with or without permission? She decided not to ask and went to the closet, where Bethany was holding up a deep purple tank top.
“Cute!” Bethany said with a smile. Blake wondered if she had a permanent one fixed on her face and returned the action.
“You like it?”
“Purple is my favorite color,” Bethany replied, holding up the top to her torso. The house phone decided to ring then and Alyson excused herself to answer it.
“Try it on,” the seventeen year old said. “See if it fits.”
Bethany’s smile widened and she took off her tee shirt to put on said tank top.
“How does it look?” she asked.
“Perfect. Purple looks great on you,” Blake complimented and then seriously worried if the younger girls’ face was going to break with her huge smile.
“Cut out the creepy happy face, Bethany. You’re grinning like an idiot,” Olivia said, almost looking disgusted at her sister’s display of ecstasy. Bethany only stuck her tongue out and looked at herself in Blake’s mirror.
“You like it?” Blake asked, ignoring Olivia’s comment, although she was really getting on her nerves.
“Yes, it’s majorly cute,” she answered, beaming. Blake laughed.
“Well, I have more clothes than I think is legally allowed. You can borrow anything anytime you want. Just let me know ahead of time.”
“For real?” her younger sister asked in disbelief. The teenage guitarist shrugged.
“Why not?”
“Score. Thank you!” she cried, then quickly hugged Blake, much to the surprise of the older girl, who kind of stood there, unsure of how to respond. She awkwardly patted Bethany’s back.
“No problem, kiddo,” she muttered.
“Let her go, Bethany! You just met her,” Olivia said, now glaring daggers at Blake openly, which ignited Blake’s anger. However, she forced herself to calm down, not wanting to start a fight. What is with this girl, anyways? she asked herself.
Bethany went red and extracted herself from Blake with an embarrassed smile.
“Sorry,” she said quietly.
“Don’t worry about it.”
“I’ll let you finish unpacking,” the fifteen year old said, remembering what Arabella said.
Olivia left the room without another word, with Bethany following her, who smiled at her again before shutting the door. Blake sighed audibly and fell onto her bed. She tried hard to not think about her older sister and whatever problem she had with Blake. After a minute of glaring at the ceiling, Blake stood and went to finish unpacking.
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Blake went down stairs after she was finished emptying her suitcases. She was in search for her biological mother and found her in the kitchen. It was about five o’clock at night and she was starting dinner. Blake cleared her throat to get Alyson’s attention, still unsure with how to address the older woman. She felt that calling her real mother by her first name would insult her, but Blake knew she wouldn’t being calling her “mom” any time soon. It would be too weird. Alyson turned to look at Blake and smiled.
“Hey Blake,” she said.
“Hey,” the teenager replied. “I, er, finished unpacking and I need someplace to put my suitcases. There’s a lot of them and there’s no room left for them upstairs.”
“Oh, you can bring them down stairs and just kind of throw them anywhere. You can put them under the stairs. It’s not really being used for anything,” the woman instructed.
“Thanks.”
“Do you need help?”
“No thanks, I got it,” the green eyed girl answered, then turned to go back up stairs.
After about twelve trips, Blake had all of her suitcases in the basement and was currently laying on her bed, a hand behind her head.
“Now what?” she asked herself quietly. She decided to play guitar until dinner was ready. She grabbed her red and black Dean Dimebag Darrell USA Razorback V and then went to work on her laptop—the one that Alyson was wondering about. Blake turned it on and, once the main screen was loaded. She double clicked on a music note icon, a program that was called “Composer.” Blake then grabbed her iPod and USB chord/sync and connected it to her black iPod Classic and to the laptop.
Immediately, a list of all the songs on her iPod appeared on the empty window screen. With a few double clicks of her wireless mouse, Blake found the playlist she wanted. She then stood up from her sitting position on the bed and grabbed a few things from her closet, which was where she kept her three amplifiers, and took out a long chord. She put it into the input of her guitar and then to the amplifier, setting the volume to five. She strummed all six strings, the sound perfectly tuned and resonated throughout the room. Blake then set up her microphone and set the volume so only someone who was in the room could hear her singing. The last thing she did before going to her laptop was connect one more chord from her amplifier to her laptop.
When she sat back down at her computer, Blake went to options and chose to have the lead guitar and lead vocals would be left out of the song while it played through the amplifier. She scrolled through the playlist, trying to decide what she wanted to play first. She found one and smiled as she double clicked on the song. She stood up and heard the five clicks of a pendulum fill the room from the speaker of her amplifier. After the last click, Blake began playing the song “Burn It Down” by Avenged Sevenfold, her all time favorite rock band. She played the lead guitar that is originally played by Synyster Gates of the band, a guitarist who was one of her musical heroes in that specific genre, which is metal. One of her favorite things to do is have a “duel” with someone who is as good at the guitar as she is. Play the same piece, one right after the other, just like Synyster Gates does with Zacky Vengeance (the other guitarist in Avenged Sevenfold) in many songs.
The beginning of the song, which was a fast paced instrumental piece, lasted about twenty seconds until Blake stepped up to the microphone to begin singing. Blake’s singing voice, before she turned fourteen, was high and at the very normal level for girls her age, even though she was a much better singing than most girls. However, after fourteen, her voice changed to a deeper, ashy pitch. This allowed her to sing songs at a lower octave, such as the song Burn It Down; she was able to almost perfectly match M. Shadows, the lead singer of the teenager’s favorite band.
This was one of Blake’s favorite songs to play by this band just because she loved the fast, high pitched, complicated sounding shredding of a guitar, which this song provided her very nicely. Although the solo wasn’t as long as she wanted it to be, she enjoyed the song nonetheless.
Blake finished out the song with a smile on her face. Music was the only thing in Blake’s existence that she was truly passionate about. Everything about her was music and there was nothing else in the world that gave her the kind of bliss that music did; not even cars, which was Blake’s other passion in life. She was extremely knowledgeable in both areas; although she cares about music much more deeply than cars.
The teenager guitarist went to her computer and chose which song to play next. She smiled at the one she found; Back in Black by AC/DC.
“A classic,” she whispered. She double clicked and waited for the five clicks to stop.
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“No, not again!” moaned Olivia, covering her ears and putting her head on the dining room table.
“Why do you say that? She’s incredible!” Bethany said. They were sitting in the dining room down stairs. Olivia was on her computer while her younger sister was reading a book.
“This music is horrible,” the nineteen year old replied.
“This is AC/DC. How can you not like them?” Bethany asked her incredulously.
“What about the song before this one?”
“Didn’t you hear the guitar? It was amazing. She’s incredibly talented.”
“She’s been playing since she was five,” Alyson said as she walked around the kitchen making chili, as per Bethany’s request. “She told me she has over twenty collectable guitars at her home in Detroit and she owns a total of eight guitars that she plays.”
“Collectable guitars are incredibly expensive. Owning over twenty would cost thousands of dollars!” Olivia said in disbelief. Alyson and Bethany looked at the other girl, both with an eyebrow raised.
“Liv...are you forgetting that she’s inherited almost half of the world’s auto making industry? And that she’s worth a few billion of dollars?” Alyson asked. Olivia frowned; obviously she had a momentary memory lapse.
“I’m pretty sure a few thousand dollars to her is like a couple dollars to us,” Bethany said.
“Still, she could be spending her money on something more productive than guitars. Like charity or giving it to the Church,” Olivia replied.
“How do you know she doesn’t give to charity?” Bethany asked. Olivia scowled.
“She has a right to spend her money however she wants. Besides, she can’t take all of her money and give it to charity. If she has a hobby she loves, then she should be able to spend money on it, just like everybody else. Also, she isn’t religious,” Alyson explained.
“She’s an atheist?” Olivia asked exasperatedly.
“She never said she didn’t believe in God, but she just told me that she’s never been to church,” Alyson corrected.
“Still,” her oldest daughter said, sighing. “Wait! Maybe I can convert her.”
“Don’t you dare ambush her or pressure her,” Bethany said, scowling at Olivia. “She’s been through enough; she doesn’t need some Jesus freak harassing her.”
“I wouldn’t ever ambush anyone; that’s wrong. But what’s the matter with trying to show someone the glory of God’s love?” Olivia asked.
“Nothing, unless you’re trying to force it onto someone who doesn’t want it.”
“That’s enough you two. Olivia, let her get settled in before you ask her to church. I don’t want her to feel like we’re alienating her or trying to change who she is.”
“From what I’ve read about her, she needs some changing,” Olivia muttered.
“Olivia Lynn, don’t you ever let me catch you saying something like that again,” Alyson scolded, looking very upset. “You shouldn’t believe everything you read about in the papers; not to mention that she is your sister. You accept her for who she is, even if you don’t agree with it.”
Olivia wisely kept her mouth shut, even though she desperately wanted to say something in return.
“Now, will you two please behave for dinner. We need her to feel as comfortable as possible in this house. You wouldn’t want to upset her, especially on her first night here,” Alyson said, her tone was final and neither of her daughters replied. She continued making dinner.
Blake was just putting her guitar away forty five minutes later when she heard a knock on her door. She called for the person to come in and saw, to her annoyance, that it was Olivia.
“Dinner is ready,” the eldest Christenson said stiffly, but Blake could see the irritation in her sister’s eyes, as if it were a major chore to tell Blake it was time to eat.
“Thanks, I’ll be down in a second,” Blake replied. Olivia didn’t say anything as she turned to leave. Blake took a deep breath and went to the bathroom to wash her hands.

7 comments:

  1. Constructive criticism: You're changing tenses a lot in paragraphs, and it gets kind of confusing.. try sticking to one to make it easier on us retards ;)

    Other than that, amazing.. Looks like it's going to have a decent plot. Keep up the good work!

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  2. It was easy to follow for me. Olivia and Blake should spent a day out like shopping or something to break the ice and get to know each other better. Taken Away has really grown on me. I love it. I can't wait for the next one and of course the next Keeper. Keep up the great work.
    ~The Caged Ginger

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  3. Okay, I'm just gonna come straight out and say it.

    I like Olivia.

    Yup, I know I'm not supposed to, I know you've kind of geared her up as an antagonist in this story, but I like her. I have a weird thing about that; I like characters I'm probably not supposed to.

    The dynamic with all involved here is well done. Within the gamut of the Christenson family you have an assortment of different outlooks on Blake being there, all of which are natural. With Alyson you have caution, with Bethany you have excitement, with Olivia you have irritation. That's all very believable because, behind it all, Blake's still a stranger to them.

    I can see coming friction over the Church issue, especially if Blake's gay or bisexual (I'm not sure if she is, but who knows?) I can't wait to see how that pans out.

    One thing I have to wonder though, given that Blake is such a polite person, doesn't it seem odd that she'd blare loud music out when she just landed there? Maybe it's just me but that seems a little inconsiderate. Or maybe it's all a part of her motif, Blake strikes me as a kind of cultural rebel; and I guess music is important to her too.

    All in all, very nice chapter. Good characterization too, especially with Olivia, I really got a feel for her temperament. Keep goin', Wild Cat!

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  4. Kaiser,

    You're not alone, my friend. Olivia is my 3rd favorite character in this story. My first is Blake, then it's the girl she meets in the next few chapters. Olivia is a pretty complex girl and has a huge heart, even though she doesn't show it very well to Blake.

    As far as Blake blaring her music and being a cultural rebel, you also have to remember that she was arrested in the prologue. And there's a line in this chapter that sort of hints at Blake's personality:

    "The older girl was not getting on Blake’s good side and that wasn’t good for anyone in the house."

    Also, you have to remember that she's the heir to the world's largest car making industry and a few billion dollars, so she was raised in high society. She knows when it is appropriate to act nice. I'm not saying she was only acting for Alyson's sake. She is a really laid back person and she has no problem with the Christenson's so she has no reason to not be nice to them.

    And one more thing on that, you are very right, music is extremely important to Blake and you'll find out why in upcoming chapters. That is the one thing she will not accommodate to anyone else's needs but her own, which will be discussed in more detail ahead, as well.

    Anyways, very long comment reply. Hope all is well :)

    Wild Cat

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  5. While coming up with the idea for Taken Away did you ever think to write it reversed? What I mean by reverse is that Taken Away has Blake taking a step down in economic ladder even though she still has her money, but did you ever think about having Blake start out less than rich and then move to a richer family?
    ~The Caged Ginger

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  6. Actually, I never thought about that. For me, Blake always had to have a large amount of money because that's a small part of the reason behind her rebellious attitude, which is kind of unoriginal, I know, but to me, it never crossed my mind that she should be poor. As you learn more about Blake's past, you'll see why she really does have to be rich to be who she is in the story.

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  7. I am anxiously awaiting the next chapter. Am I being too impatient by asking for a relative date when you'll post chapter 3? I am quite intrigued by this story. You're a good writer hun, and you keep your readers wanting more.

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